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Hey Now this is a beautiful poem , the words used simple and even i can understand them... but one shud not do what one is unhappy doing.. one shud find something they are happy doing
Hi Bikramjit,Liked your comment for its honesty and also for the fact that I am seeing you here for the first time. Yes, it is true - one must not do what one is unhappy doing. But sometimes, their are duties, jobs that just cannot be thwarted. They have to be done.Of course, I get rid of all or any desperation (personal or general) through my poetry.
I'm not really a poem person, but this one followed well and was easy to visualize. iLike! :)
Nice that you liked the poem inspite of not being very fond of poetry. That's a compliment:)Hope to see you here more often!
very interesting and beautiful!.I depise yet prize..what a word chosen for the one who ramps...very thoughtful indeed :)
Thanks Uma for the appreciation. Nice to see you here. The poem is mainly philosophical. It applies to models and to us all.Have a lovely day!
You did indeed write a philosophical poem. Loved it!
Your poem is very insightful, and very painful. "I hear the sound of emptiness emanate" is such a fitting statement for what many of these models must eventually come to feel.
Enjoyed the tensions you develop through your lines, for example "despised yet prized." Bleak depiction of emptiness, and wonderfully written. Thank you for checking out One Shot!
nice oneshot..catering to the whims of the world..was my favorite linelove how the poem develops - balance life on stilettos..not an easy task
Nice, piece Shail. Thanks for linking to Magpie Tales.
seeing life from those heights does tend to open ones eyes...but it also blinds, making it difficult to come down.
That was a very beautiful poem. I could personally relate to so much of it. Thank you for sharing.
every sound of my shoes only soar me highinto the realms of a illusionary worldI despise yet prize.... powerful words and honest self awareness how true it is that we can love and hate something we think we want in life.
Thanks Diane. Nice that you liked the poem. Lovely Day to you.Shail
Yes Mary, Sometimes, pain can set you going on the creative track and it sets you wondering.... is beauty behind pain?
Hi Dustus,Nice that you liked the poem. I like the concept of One Shot. It is a good creative venture.
Hi Claudia,Yes, walking on stilettos is just not easy but we keep doing it all the time (voluntarily or not).And when in pain, we wonder, did we really want it all? Was it worth the effort?
Hi Willow,I liked your site and your venture. I hope to become a regular there.Nice of you.Lovely DayShail
i came looking for your magpie but was delighted to read...this is a rather scary read...someone so lost in themselves that they have lost themselves...great write though and love the flow of thoughts...
Shail, you write so beautifully.. wonderful weaving of words :D
Hello,How are you?I invite you to join our poetry community at http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/,It would be great for you to take a look at our playground, sign in to follow if you wish,our major event is Monday Poetry Potluck, you are encouraged to link in one of your favorite poem, or write a poem over the weekend that is related to our theme, (week 6 is seven sins), hope to see you stop by, do let us know when you do and leave us a note so that one of our officials gets back to you.... Our Monday poetry potluck is open from Sunday 8pm to Wednesday, 8am. you have 60 hours to submit one quality poem and share.Writing your entry ahead of the time and link in as early as possible would get you more traffic and is strongly recommend...please let me know via email if you have further questions...Happy Weekend.U Rock!xoxox
I too came for the magpie, but instead found this...Such an insightful piece... One should never lose sight of oneself doing/being what the world expects, yet it has become so easy to succomb to such things, hasn't it?Nicely expressed!
.....smiling to none and all....I thought this line was wonderful. Felt the heart of it!
Yes it is a very philosophical piece of excellent poetry writing, it can be a statement on many levels of life and not just the obvious you posed here in your writing. I see people have self imposed duties and obligations that are really meaningless in life and they would be better to sit and enjoy life then engage in them , on the more mundane level too often we give up our selves to follow the fashion and norms of the day.Lovely write, nice magpie tale.joannyhttp://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/
Thanks Joanny. Nice to know that you understood the poem perfectly for what it meant. Hoping to keep in touch with each other's creative stuff.Nice DayShail
Thanks Jingle. Nice you liked the poem.
loved the theme !!it depicts the feelings of a ramp walker...creatively written Well done.
Thanks Jyoti. Nice that you enjoyed the theme. Hope to see more of you.
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