Tuesday, March 29, 2011

Nearly There!


I nearly reached there!
All on my own
enjoying my self imposed solitude,
wishing for no strange presence
to destroy my self bestowed peace
I sailed along
carrying myself
a one man army
fully immersed
in me, mine, myself.

I nearly reached there!
When I discovered
the sailing solitude
I so longed for
was only loneliness,
the peace prickly pieces of arrogant dust
covering my confused conflicted mind,
what I needed
was another sailing boat,
sea or stream, just sharing life together!

21 comments:

Inquisitives09 said...

Beautiful. I love the essence.... Keep Writing...

Shail Mohan said...

Yeah sometimes we think solitude is what we need, when actually what we want is someone along. Loved the way you put this fact into verse :)

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Thanks Shail. Yes, solitude is a necessity but more so is the ability to share... Glad you enjoyed the poem...

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Thanks Aankeet. Nice you liked it...

Btm2007 said...

nice aliteration in peace prickly...yes our independence can become a false illusion od strength when in reality it only hides loneliness...nice...

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Thanks Brian. So nice of you....

Hope said...

this is really beautiful!
love this line
'the peace prickly pieces of arrogant dust' just seemed to hit me.

Adriana Carpio said...

This is a beautiful poem. I agree we can't always shrug off loneliness to solitude. One is peaceful, the other....alone.

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Thanks dear Hope. Good to see you here.....

Nice Lovely day.

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Very true Adriana. It's always like this.

Thanks for dropping by and sharing....

JamieDededs said...

Lovely! Lovely! Agree ...

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Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Thank you dear Jamie for the advance wishes. Have been loving being part of the whole poetry forum......

Varun Reddy said...

Can I anything more than the fact that it nearly brought tears in my eyes... Lovely...

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Thanks Varun. I understand the tears...

Shewriting/Sheila Moore said...

yes, I think I would be so much happy at time in solitude but in reality I would probably just get very lonely. I can relate to your sentiments here, Shail. Hope you are doing well.

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

True Sheila. Yes, I am doing well. Just busy with too many things...

Judy Roney said...

What a cool airy sailing metaphor. I like both, sailing alone and with someone.

Bhargavi said...

Very true Shail...solitude journey with a partner to share it, otherwise, it would be such a boring task, isn't it!

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Thanks Varun. I truly understand the tears.. Keep reading like you always do.

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Hi Judy. Yes, sailing alone has its own pleasures too but sometimes we get too carried away and then we find that the solitude has turned into loneliness. This is what is expressed in the poem.
Thanks for sharing.

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

I agree entirely Bhargavi. But sometimes, reflections, solitude is also necessary, a kind of balance for both so that we don't take each other for granted and also have some space...