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Tuesday, March 29, 2011

Nearly There!


I nearly reached there!
All on my own
enjoying my self imposed solitude,
wishing for no strange presence
to destroy my self bestowed peace
I sailed along
carrying myself
a one man army
fully immersed
in me, mine, myself.

I nearly reached there!
When I discovered
the sailing solitude
I so longed for
was only loneliness,
the peace prickly pieces of arrogant dust
covering my confused conflicted mind,
what I needed
was another sailing boat,
sea or stream, just sharing life together!

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21 comments:

  1. Inquisitives09March 30, 2011 at 6:08 AM

    Beautiful. I love the essence.... Keep Writing...

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  2. Shail MohanMarch 30, 2011 at 8:41 PM

    Yeah sometimes we think solitude is what we need, when actually what we want is someone along. Loved the way you put this fact into verse :)

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  3. Shail RaghuvanshiMarch 30, 2011 at 11:11 PM

    Thanks Shail. Yes, solitude is a necessity but more so is the ability to share... Glad you enjoyed the poem...

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  4. Shail RaghuvanshiMarch 30, 2011 at 11:14 PM

    Thanks Aankeet. Nice you liked it...

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  5. Btm2007March 31, 2011 at 5:02 AM

    nice aliteration in peace prickly...yes our independence can become a false illusion od strength when in reality it only hides loneliness...nice...

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  6. Shail RaghuvanshiMarch 31, 2011 at 11:05 PM

    Thanks Brian. So nice of you....

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  7. HopeApril 1, 2011 at 12:29 PM

    this is really beautiful!
    love this line
    'the peace prickly pieces of arrogant dust' just seemed to hit me.

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  8. Adriana CarpioApril 1, 2011 at 5:24 PM

    This is a beautiful poem. I agree we can't always shrug off loneliness to solitude. One is peaceful, the other....alone.

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  9. Shail RaghuvanshiApril 2, 2011 at 7:14 AM

    Thanks dear Hope. Good to see you here.....

    Nice Lovely day.

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  10. Shail RaghuvanshiApril 2, 2011 at 7:15 AM

    Very true Adriana. It's always like this.

    Thanks for dropping by and sharing....

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  11. JamieDededsApril 3, 2011 at 1:47 AM

    Lovely! Lovely! Agree ...

    ... and - just FYI - you are featured today on Jingle Poetry, Sunday Rally Dispatch.
    http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/

    Happy Birthday!

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  12. Shail RaghuvanshiApril 3, 2011 at 5:44 AM

    Thank you dear Jamie for the advance wishes. Have been loving being part of the whole poetry forum......

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  13. Varun ReddyApril 7, 2011 at 1:06 AM

    Can I anything more than the fact that it nearly brought tears in my eyes... Lovely...

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  14. Shail RaghuvanshiApril 7, 2011 at 2:48 AM

    Thanks Varun. I understand the tears...

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  15. Shewriting/Sheila MooreApril 7, 2011 at 8:19 AM

    yes, I think I would be so much happy at time in solitude but in reality I would probably just get very lonely. I can relate to your sentiments here, Shail. Hope you are doing well.

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  16. Shail RaghuvanshiApril 7, 2011 at 10:03 AM

    True Sheila. Yes, I am doing well. Just busy with too many things...

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  17. Judy RoneyApril 7, 2011 at 2:48 PM

    What a cool airy sailing metaphor. I like both, sailing alone and with someone.

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  18. BhargaviApril 7, 2011 at 7:11 PM

    Very true Shail...solitude journey with a partner to share it, otherwise, it would be such a boring task, isn't it!

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  19. Shail RaghuvanshiApril 7, 2011 at 10:07 PM

    Thanks Varun. I truly understand the tears.. Keep reading like you always do.

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  20. Shail RaghuvanshiApril 7, 2011 at 10:09 PM

    Hi Judy. Yes, sailing alone has its own pleasures too but sometimes we get too carried away and then we find that the solitude has turned into loneliness. This is what is expressed in the poem.
    Thanks for sharing.

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  21. Shail RaghuvanshiApril 7, 2011 at 10:10 PM

    I agree entirely Bhargavi. But sometimes, reflections, solitude is also necessary, a kind of balance for both so that we don't take each other for granted and also have some space...

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